6:24am
I’m tired.
I want that hour back.
I want the morning darkness to end.
I want the sky to be shades of pinks and blues RIGHT NOW.
I want to see the sun before heading inside to work all day in the basement classroom.
I’m tired.
I want someone to take my order at McDonalds.
All I want is an oatmeal and an ice tea.
Can’t find it on the “fast and &” kiosk.
Touch, touch touch.
There it is.
Wait.
How did I order and pay for 2 of each?
Take a table tent? Where? Oh, there?
6:32
Wait,
Now they are taking orders at the cash register?
Now the iced tea containers are rolled out to the beverage bar?
Next time, I’m arriving after 6:30am.
Too early for me to be a kiosk-ordering-kind-of-person.
I’m tired.
Writing Stories by Sally 
Powerful use of repetition. I feel it, too! Simple tasks seem so hard when you’re bone-tired.
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I feel your pain. I hated getting up before light and don’t understand the usefulness of daylight savings time.
I love “I’m tired” and the progress of your kiosk experience. Excellent use of repetition, Sally. Hope you enjoyed your breakfast.
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I do not miss those clock changing hangover days- I seemed to suffer in both directions! I love the way you broke this up by time.
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I enjoyed the repetition and the humor of your piece. The idea of arriving later so that things go faster is SO true in so much of what we do, right?! The use of “I’m tired” has multiple meanings throughout and I love your use of it.
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Good writing. I could feel your exhaustion through your words! Hope the day perks up for you!
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You have captured the “too early” mood and mode excellently. I hope that the rest of the day was better.
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You wrote it quickly, while tired, and yet look at all the good craft moves!
Must be that writing practice building up skills and habits…
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You are so kind!! Thanks for noticing my moves while tired and hungry!!
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I agree with the other commenters about how all the craft moves exhibited in this piece mirror the moment just right. Hunger, frustration, vitamin D deficiency- I am right there with you.
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Oh man, can I identify with that line, “I’m tired “! Your piece captures that early morning fog that is caused by the “spring forward” nightmare that I dread during this part of the year ! Well done 🙂
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Thanks! A “well done” coming from you means lots!
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I love your internal monologue and the way you portrayed how tired you were while interacting with the kiosk. I really like the idea of focusing on a small chunk of time- I will try this technique in the future.
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My opinion exactly when faced with the kiosk to order. . . “GRRR!” Service!
🙂
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I can feel how tired you are in this piece – and it is so early! For me, the Kiosk would be a problem at any hour though, tired or not.
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The dissonance in the middle makes the resolution all the more welcome, if somewhat lonely. And of course, that is the point.
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